Major Project: Why we decided to not change the structure

After several meetings with Simon, giving us feedback on our project one of his biggest concerns was that we forget about liam. And since saying this, I agreed. However, in practice in the actual edit itself it just didnt work. Below is an exported version of this different structure which myslef and Jack spent a couple of days on. However, after watching back it becomes too confusing as we are always jumping from one person to the other.Whilst it works at the beginning from Eddie to Liam it then gradually loses it because the sequence is re-ordered the rest of it loses its flow. The best structure for this documentary in our opinion is to introduce Jan then Liam and then Eddie. From Eddie what he says links very well to what the DNA expert says and it spirals from there. The audience bcome engaged with the Eddies story, and then Jan goes through what went wrong in Jordans trial and then then same again for liam. Breaking from these stories whilst being engaged with them takes away from them and can be very jarring. After shwoing several other people this version of the edit we came to the conclusion to stick with the origional plan. I thin kSimons feedback was fair and made sence on paper. But unfortunately in practice in the edit itself it just didn't work.

Another point was to remove he self harm talk from Peter as none of the others talk about self harm. Again this made sence on paper, but when removing it we found that there was n o gateway into thoughts of suicide and feeling lonely in a prison cell when convicted for a crime that you weren't guilty of. So again, we decided to stick with it.





I appreciate all feedbakc we have been given form various people which we have fully concidered and tried. Our decision to go against some of it was disheartening after spending a lot of times attempting to make ammendments but that's somehting to expect in the industry. We could show this film to another 30 people asking to critique it and all of them would say different things.


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